Fullmetal Alchemist fic: Unravel

[woodface]

Disclaimer: not mine.
Rating: PG
Characters: Roy Mustang, Riza Hawkeye
Spoilers/Set: Chapter 60 of the manga
A/N: I think me writing fic for this pairing (and this fandom) means I'm doomed. Thanks to rabid_bunny for the beta.

Summary: This is set right after the funeral of Riza's father and the conversation she had with Mustang.

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They hadn’t spoken at all on their way back from the cemetery, but she could feel his questions forming with every step they took. Just like she knew that if she were to glance sideways, there would be no trace of his insecurity on his face. She didn’t know Roy Mustang as much more than her father’s pupil, but the dream he told her about is one she can relate to, one she wouldn’t mind getting behind.

She heard him quietly close the door behind them and she slowly slipped the coat from her shoulders, taking extra care to drape it over the back of the chair.

“I’m afraid I don’t understand,” Roy spoke up as she stayed silent. He took a step towards her, but stopped as she started to unbutton her shirt. “What are you doing?”

There was a flicker of something in his eyes that went deeper than curiosity, and she turned her back towards him as she continued to open the buttons, trying to ignore that for once her hands weren’t as steady as they usually were. “You wanted to see my father’s secret,” she reminded him.

“Yes, but…” Whatever protest he had died as she slipped her shirt down, baring her back to him.

For a moment, the room was filled with nothing but the sound of the old clock on the mantelpiece, and she could almost feel his gaze on her as he tried to make sense of the tattoo. He took a step closer and then another until she felt the air stir against her back with every breath he took.

“You said it was in code,” he said, and she nodded even if he didn’t need a confirmation. “And I can’t make any copies.”

“No. Anything you write down, you burn immediately afterwards,” she replied.

“This,” he paused, and Riza wasn’t sure if she had really felt the soft brush of his gloves against her skin. “It’s going to take a while,” he finished and took a step back.

She nodded and pulled her shirt over her shoulders again. “I know.”

Comments

[zauberer-sirin.livejournal.com]

very nice. very canon-like in its feeling. good job. i particularly liked: “This,” he paused, and Riza wasn’t sure if she had really felt the soft brush of his gloves against her skin.

keep it up.

[woodface]

Thank you very much! I love this pairing so much and I was nervous about getting them wrong.

[zauberer-sirin.livejournal.com]

no worries, you got them perfectly okay; actually there was a hint of quietness in Roy here that was very much the Roy in my head somehow. i almost never read Roy/Hawkeye fic unless i know the writer already but i´m glad i read this. they really are the best pairing ever XD

[woodface]

They are an awesome pairing. I only recently got through all of the canon (both manga and anime) and I just love them so much. They're so complex and... I'm going to start rambling. I'm in my squeeful phase. *g*

Thank you for reading!

[simargl-wings.livejournal.com]

Mmmmmm, lovely.

You've got the characterization and the relationship nailed.

More plz!

[woodface]

Thank you!

There probably won't be more to this fic as I like it the way it is right now. But this pairing has gotten in my head so much these last few days that I won't be surprised if I end up writing more fic.

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

Very lovely piece.

[woodface]

Thank you kindly. =o)

[peppermintwords.livejournal.com]

Nicely done :). Just one thing: bearing her back to him
"bearing" should be "baring".

[woodface]

Oops! Thanks for catching that! *goes fix*

[grass-angel.livejournal.com]

Very... subtle.

Not much there, but what there is, is very soft-spoken. Quite lovely.

[woodface]

Thank you!

I know it's short, but for some reason it felt whole like this so...

[grass-angel.livejournal.com]

Don't worry, it's just right like this. ^_^

[goldensniper.livejournal.com]

Wonderful job, your characterization is perfect!

I had recently stopped reading Fanfics because it was so hard to find Authors who seem that they know what this awesome pairing is truly about...

Please, keep it up!

[woodface]

Thank you so much!

I've only just started looking around for fic on this pairing, but I think I get what you mean. They have a complicated relationship and it's hard to write something "romantic" and keep them IC at the same time. I'm glad this fic worked out.

[(Anonymous)]

This was pretty legal!!
As a lot of people said before, they are a complex couple, and is difficult find some fanfic that keep it. But, you did it!! I loved this one ^^.

[woodface]

Thank you for reading and the lovely feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

very nicely done

[woodface]

Thank you!